第三章英國名家演說漢譯(編輯修改稿)

　

【文章內容簡介】 Nevertheless, some minor readjustments can be witnessed throughout in the present translation. C) Translation 3: ? 我經常將我的成功歸功于年輕時當記者受到了有益的嚴格訓練。我百年之后，我的兒子們在談到他們的父親時會說，他將記者生涯當作成名的階梯而引以自豪。不然的話，我不認為，他們的父親是個訓練有素的人。但總體上看，他們的父親是訓練有素的。 Comments: ? The present translation has put right the remaining mistake in Translation 2. In addition, it has reduced the first long sentence in Translation 2 into a condensed short sentence. Besides, taking into consideration of Chinese norms, the present translation has employed such ready expressions as談到他們的父親時會說 。 記者生涯 and others to substitute for the corresponding parts in the previous translation。 and 他們的父親是個訓練有素的人 。 and 他們的父親是訓練有素的 , are results of explicit translation. Consequently, the present translation is more readable, coherent and authentic. Original 33: ? Hence, gentlemen, under any circumstances, this pany would have been exceptionally interesting and gratifying to me. But whereas I supposed that like the fairies? pavilion in “Arabian Nights”, it would be but a mere handful, and I find it turn out, like the same elastic pavilion, capable of prehending a multitude, so much the more proud am I of the honor of being your guest。 for you will readily believe that the more widely representative of the press in America my entertainers are, the more I must feel the goodwill and the kindly sentiments towards me of the vast institution. 1) Analysis of the original: ?A) Grammatical analysis ?B) Stylistic analysis A) Grammatical analysis: ?(1) Sentence structure ?(2) Additional plication ?(3) Notes ?(4) Paraphrase (1) Sentence structure： ? The selection consists of two sentences, of which the first sentence is simple in structure while the second is a plex sentence, posed of an adverbial clause of concession which consists of a main clause and an object clause, a main clause, consisting of two coordinate clauses, and an adverbial clause of consequence with an adverbial clause of reason after it, which in turn consists of a main clause and an adverbial clause of parison in the pattern the more… , the more… . (2) Additional plication： ? The first sentence has a plicated beginning posed of an adverb, a vocative and a prepositional phrase. The second sentence begins with an adverb followed by an adverbial clause, whose subject clause begins with a prepositional structure。 in the second coordinate clause of the main clause of the sentence, there is a parenthesis embedded, that is, like the same elastic pavilion。 and the order of the adverbial clause of consequence is partially inverted, and so is the order of the adverbial clause of parison together with its main clause. And the first sentence is in subjunctive mood. (3) Notes： ? In the second sentence, but whereas I supposed that like the fairies’ pavilion in “Arabian Nights” means but in contrast to my supposition that … . The pavilion in “Arabian Nights” refers to a small tent that can acmodate a small number of people. Still in the second sentence, it would be but a mere handful means it would only be a few。 and … and I find it turn out, like the same elastic pavilion, capable of prehending a multitude could be rearranged in this way: … and I find it turn out capable of prehending a multitude like the same elastic pavilion. Notes (continued) ? The backbone structure of But whereas I supposed that like the fairies’ pavilion in “Arabian Nights”, it would be but a mere handful, and I find it turn out, like the same elastic pavilion, capable of prehending a multitude, so much the more proud am I of the honor of being your guest is but whereas I supposed that … it would be… , and I find it… , so much the more proud am I of … 。 for you will readily believe… . (4) Paraphrase： ? Based on the above analysis, we believe that it is unnecessary to paraphrase the first sentence and in the following, only the second sentence is paraphrased. Originally I supposed that like the fairies? pavilion in “Arabian Nights”, the gathering would only consist of a small number of entertainers but I find out that it turns out to be, like the same elastic pavilion, capable of acmodating a great many. For this reason, I am much more proud of the honor of being your guest. The reason lies within your ready belief that the more representatives e from the press of America as my entertainers, the more goodwill and kind sentiments towards me of the vast anization I must feel. B) Stylistic analysis: ?(1) Periodicity ?(2) Structural plication ?(3) Parallel structure ?(4) Cohesive device ?(5) Structural and lexical formality (1) Periodicity： ? The two sentences in the selection are periodic in structure, for the first has a plicated beginning while the second begins with an adverb and an adverbial clause of contrast together with a prepositional phrase embedded as a parenthesis. (2) Structural plication： ? The first is a simple sentence while the second is structurally plicated with multiple embeddings. (3) Parallel structure： ? In the selection, parallel structures could be found, for example, interesting and gratifying。 like the fairies’ pavilion and like the same elastic pavilion。 and the more… , the more… . (4) Cohesive device： ? In terms of cohesive device, examples could be found as follows: I is repeatedly used with me and my as partial repetitions。 pavilion is repeated。 the vast institution is used to stand for the press in America and this pany. (5) Structural and lexical formality： ? Structurally, the selection is formal in that the sentences it contains are grammatically plete and free from colloquial structures. Lexically, formal words and nominalizations are popularly used